*First short*

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*First short*

Hi guys,

I'm Andy.  I'm new to the site and forums.  I just finished animating my first short and was looking for some feedback.  Any comments?  Concerns?  Querries?  Conundrums?  Questions?  Constructive criticism?  Derogatory remarks?

https://vimeo.com/139535861

Very good Andy! Well animated

Very good Andy! Well animated and humourous. 

Mild quibble though - I think the animation could've benefitted with some additional sound effects and music. 

But overall, great stuff that you should be pleased with. Keep up the good work. :D

Thank you.

Thank you.

What parts do you think could've used more sound effects?  I did put a few in, but I might've missed some places or just not thought of them.

No problem, I look forward to

No problem, I look forward to what you have in store in future. :)

Some background sound may have been nice, just to reflect the different enviroments and locations in the short. Also at 1:06, the addition of sound when Andyana lands on the ground could've added some impact to to his over-the-top character. 3:05-3:30 too, I felt could've benefitted with the sound of running footsteps as he's escaping the museum. I was also going to say the addition of the actual Indiana Jones theme tune would've been better, however, on reconsideration - I think a hummed version actually works in favour to this short's charm and humour. 

Lastly, don't take what I'm saying as slander against your work - I still think you did a pretty great job and I think you've got a lot of potential. I also noticed a picture of Rick & Morty in the museum, which made me smile, as your drawing style reminded me of that show. Keep the good stuff coming! :D